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Story - Outro/Ending

Post  Tobi-chan on Mon May 25, 2009 11:19 am

Outrodialog, synvinklar etc.



Close-up of Vera right outside the cage in Baba Yaga’s cottage (stuga).

Vera: Thank you. It feels good to be able to move about again.

Group shot of all five outside the cottage.

Irta: But where are Rusalka, Lelya and Magda?

Close up of Vera.

Vera: They’re not far away; I can feel their auras somewhere below us.

Close up of Milenka.

Milenka: We have to save them!

Close up of Irta.

Irta: There is a hatch in the floor, maybe we can open it now that we’re together?

Group shot of all the babushkas standing by the hatch (lucka).

Nadezhda: Let’s save the others!

Black screen.

Text: To be continued

Roll credits with music.
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Post  louisestigell on Mon May 25, 2009 11:43 am

Detta blir jättebra.

Ändrade en replik bara för att få in mer referenser:



"Close-up of Vera right outside the cage in Baba Yaga’s cottage (stuga).

Vera: Thank you. It feels good to be able to move about again.

Group shot of all five outside the cottage.

Irta: But where are Rusalka, Lelya and Magda?

Close up of Vera.

Vera: They’re not far away; I can feel their auras somewhere below us.

Close up of Milenka. She's nervous and scared.

Milenka: Hey... We should get going quickly before Baba Yaga returns...


Close up of Irta.

Irta: There is a hatch in the floor, maybe we can open it now that we’re together?

Group shot of all the babushkas standing by the hatch (lucka).

Nadezhda: Let’s go save the others!

Black screen.

Text: To be continued

Roll credits with music."
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Post  Tobi-chan on Mon May 25, 2009 11:54 am

Om den repliken skall kännas det minsta naturlig behöver babushkorna etablera att de känner till Baba Yaga, t.ex. nämna henne vid namn någon gång innan slutet, helst med någon form av beskrivning. Var skall detta pusslas in?
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Post  louisestigell on Mon May 25, 2009 11:57 am

Det har jag tänkt kolla med dig, inte hunnit nu bara för jag är extremt stressad nu innan lunch.
Men det hade varit bra om du kunde smyga in det någonstans i dialogen. Som det står där någonstans på min lapp så hade jag tänkt mig att man kan prata med Vera när hon sitter i buren och att hon då säger något om Baba Yaga.
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